Rough Drafts
Patrick's Draft:
My friends and I like to play lacrosse. We have to take a lot of equipment. We have a stick with a net at the end. We have goals at each end of the field. Usually it is played outdoors on a field.

On my team there are 18 players. They are all boys. Some of their names are Justin, Zach, Tyler, Shawn, John, Billy, Josh, Edward, Brandon, and Pat. The team has stuck together for two years. Most of these boys are my friends. Some of them go to high school. They practice on their free time and try to be better players.

Zach was the best lacrosse player ever. Zach had to be off the team for awhile because he sprained his ankle. He had his shoe untied during one of the games and he tripped over his shoelace and sprained his ankle. The team missed him. The best player made it back in time for the game. The team was losing and suddenly Zach came back in the middle of the game. The team was excited! Justen ran up to Zach and said, "Your back!" The coach said, "Zach, replace Tyler in the game."

Zach scored three goals. The final score was Virginia Dragons 3 goals and The Dallas Stars won the championship with 5 goals.


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Staci's Draft:
One day Carrie decided she would go to the beach. She went to go get her best friends named Kimyada and Tiffanie. When they were driving there they saw seagulls outside the window. Also they saw farm animals in the fields. In two hours they would be at the beach. On the way there no one fell asleep because they were too busy talking and looking out the windows.

They finally arrived at the beach and then they went up to the water. They stepped into the water it was cold! Brrrrr! After they were finshed swimming they played vollyball. When the game was finished the girls were hot again. They walked down to the water and started to put seashells in a bucket. When they began to look for some more shells they left the bucket on the beach. Then the sea knocked over the bucket and took the shells into the water. They didn't worry about it because they had plenty of buckets at home and they knew that there were lots of shells left to be found. They told Carrie's Mommy about the bucket and she walked out into the ocean to get the bucket.

Then Carrie went to go get some crabs out of her Mommy's bucket of crabs. After she had finished eating her crabs she laid down on the towel. They stayed there for a long time.

When Kimyada, Tiffanie, and Carrie got ready to leave they put their shells in the bucket. Carrie grabbed the towel and her Mom grabbed the kooler. Then they left the beach. That will be a day that the girls will never forget!


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Brenna's Draft:
I want to be found by my master. My master wants to find me too. I ran away because of a chocolate lab that lives in town. I followed her and then I got lost. I was scared and I wanted to go home but I don't know how to. I was lost. I tried to go home but I couldn't find my home. I was scared and hungry.

My master called all her friends but they couldn't find me. I spotted a rabbit and I chased him but I got more lost. I missed my master. I looked around. I found a dog. He helped but he had to go to his house. I needed some food so I caught a rabbit.

When I was eating I heard my name being called again and again. I followed the voice and I saw my master. She took me back to our home. My owner and I are happy again. I will never run away again.

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