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| Rough Drafts |
| William: |
| I can remember one snowy day when I was little I had a snowball fight with my mom. We were having lots of fun for a little while. Then my mom hit me with a snowball on my head. It was an accident but it made me mad and I threw one back. It hit my mom on the forehead. She fell back in a snowdrift. She had to go in the house and put ice on her forehead because a bump swelled up. I felt sad because of what I had done. Mom stopped playing snowball fighting for a few years. We haven't had a lot of snow since that time but when it snows again I will ask my mom if she will have another snowball fight now that I am older. |
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| Joy: |
| Once upon a time two monkeys found some clothes that had been left by campers. They began dressing up like little girls. The girls return and see the monkeys in their clothes. At first they are very mad with the monkeys for wearing their clothes but then a lion comes along and roars at the group. The whole group runs in different directions into the jungle. The girls ask, "Where did the monkeys go?." The monkeys ask, "Where did the lion go?" The two girls hide in a cave and think they are safe. Inside the cave there are bats flying around. The monkeys climb high into the trees. The lion looks for the two girls until he gets tired. The girls look out of the cave and saw the monkeys in the trees but did not see the lion. They begin to come out of the cave. They did not see him but the lion was still there. He was watching them through the trees. The girls saw him and started running away from the lion again but they stopped and turned around. One of the girls said, "Pick on somebody your own size." The lion stopped chasing the girls and left them alone. At least for now. The girls were able to get their clothes back together except for the clothes the monkeys were still wearing in the trees. |
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| David: |
| This is a story about a Ninja. The Ninja's name is Tifugee. He has to catch the evil Etchygonna, the emperor's brother. They have an adventure at the emperor's house in China. Etchygonna has taken the emperor as a prisoner in the castle. Tifugee battles the evil Etchygonna's warriors to help free the emperor. To stop getting hurt by some of the warriors Tifugee uses his hook grabber and climbs to the top of the emperor's house. He walks around looking for the place Etchygonna has hidden his brother, the emperor. Tifugee meets Etchygonna and when he does, Etchygonna calls for his strongest warrior. Tifugee escapes from the warrior and leaves a trail of tacks behind him. Etchygonna's warrior comes along and does not see the tacks. He steps on them and can not walk and follow Tifugee. When the warrior is not able to follow Tifugee then Etchygonna has to track him all by himself. Tifugee makes a trap by digging a hole in the ground and covering it with branches. Etchygonna falls into it. Tifugee pulls him up and puts him in a bamboo cage. He puts the cage in the forest near a cool stream. Etchygonna stays in the bamboo cage until someone comes into the forest and sees him. The stranger wants to know why he is in the cage. Etchygonna tricks the person into letting him out. Etchygonna has learned how powerful Tifugee is and when he is let out of the cage he decides never to go back to China. |
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| Stephen: |
| The messy pig was a troublemaker. The other characters were a quick cat, a strong horse and a friendly dog. A snow storm came. The animals decided to build a snowman. The messy pig did not help the others. Then a strong wind blew the snowman's head off. The horse saw the snowman head on the ground. The cat, and the dog decided to help the horse put the head back on. The horse laid down and the dog crawled on the horse's back. The cat crawled on the dog's head and put the snowman's head back on. They were happy that the snowman was back together again. The messy pig didn't like the snowman or the friends working together to make the snowman. When he saw how much fun they were having together he decided to join them but he was too short to build a very tall snowman. His new friends help him to build a snowman of his own. They played together every day after that. |
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| Ana: |
| Once upon a time a little girl lived and her name was Ana. She had two cats. There was a box out in her hall that was supposed to have a present put in it to be mailed to a friend in the jungle. One day her two curious cats climbed up to look in the box and fell inside. The top closed on the box and the little cats were mailed by mistake. When it was delivered to the jungle a bobcat opened the box with his claws. The two cats stuck their heads up out of the box and when they saw the bobcat they ran as fast as they could. Until the bobcat said, "No wait." I am not going to eat you. The bobcat stopped running after them and they made friends with each other. They told the bobcat that they were sent to the jungle by mistake. They asked him how they could get back. He did not know what to say. The girl at home saw that her two the cats where missing. She remembered the box had been there to send. She asked her mom if somebody could go to the jungle to check on the two cats. They asked their neighbor if he would go. Ana gave him a picture of the two cats. The neighbor went on his way. He found the cats shortly after he got there beside a banana tree and he called their name. They came to him and he put them in his coat to take back to the airport. He put them in a little box so that they could ride on the airplane with him. The little girl was very happy to have her cats returned. |
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| Dejontrice: |
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My best friend and I went to the beach to swim. We played with a beach ball near the water. The ball rolled towards the water and a wave took it out into the ocean. We each ate a hot dog and ice cream while we sat on our beach blanket on the sand. We saw a lot of seagulls flying in the sky. They would fly down to us and try to get some of our fries. We brought our dog to swim with us. She enjoys swimming in the water. My friend and I decided to go for a swim after we got tired of sitting on the beach. We walked out into the ocean and it felt warm and bubbly on our legs. We were having fun jumping up and down in the waves. A strong wave knocked her down and she almost drowned. My dog swam out into the water and pulled my friend out by her bathing suit straps. The lifeguard said that my dog was very brave. He also told my friend not to go out so far in the water because the waves were high. It was a scary time but it is also a day that I will always remember when my friend and I went to the beach to swim. |
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