Story Ideas

William's story ideas:
  1. A snowball fight between my mom and I.
  2. My mom hit me with a snowball on my head.
  3. I threw one and hit my mom on the forehead.
  4. She fell back in a snowdrift.
  5. She had to go in the house and put ice on her forehead.
  6. A bump swelled on her forehead.
  7. I felt sad because of what I had done.
  8. Mom stopped playing snowball fighting for a few years.
William:
I like your story idea! I think it will be interesting to see how you tell it. I can imagine that things went very quickly from being FUN to being UPSETTING when you accidentally hurt your mother's forehead with the snowball. Stories that tell about the author's feelings are often very interesting to the people reading them. I look forward to seeing your first draft.
Joy's story ideas:
  1. I would like to write my story about animals.
  2. I would like to write about elephants.
  3. Two elephants are laughing and talking in the jungle.
  4. They are laughing at the funny monkeys.
  5. The monkeys are dressing up like little girls.
  6. They find some clothes that have been left by campers.
  7. The girls return and see the monkeys in their clothes.
  8. A lion comes along and roars at the group.
  9. The whole group runs in different directions into the jungle.
  10. The girls ask, "Where are the monkeys and elephants?"
  11. The monkeys ask, "Where did the lion go?"
  12. The elephants say, "Wait for us, guys."
  13. The two girls hide in a cave and think they are safe.
  14. Inside the cave there are bats flying around.
  15. The monkeys climb high into the trees.
  16. The elephants hide in the river.
  17. The lion looks for the two girls until he gets tired.
  18. The girls hear a loud snap and peep out of the cave.
  19. The girls see the lion in a trap.
  20. The girls say, "We can't leave him here alone."
  21. They go to find the elephants and monkeys to help.
  22. They all become friends when the lion is out of the trap.
Joy:
What a great and funny idea to write about monkeys who find little girls' clothes and dress up in them. Sounds like a fun book to illustrate! Here's the thing though, I'm not sure exactly what is happening in your story, whether it is about the monkeys or the girls whose clothes they steal or those laughing elephants. It's an awful lot of characters to keep track of. Why don't you try making your story a little bit simpler and focus on what happens between the monkeys and the girls. How will the girls get their clothes back - can they find a way to trick the monkeys into taking them off? Then, if you want to have that exciting part about the lion, maybe the monkeys and girls need to find a way to work together to keep from being eaten by the lion. I'm less interested in how they make friends with the lion, than in how they work out the problems between themselves. Do you see what I mean? Sometimes it's more fun to tell a story if it's all laid out beforehand in a way that makes it easy to tell. With 22 points in your story idea, I would say that chances are your story is a little bit too complicated so far. It's ALWAYS easier to cut out a few ideas, than to find new good ones, so don't be discouraged by this advice. I'm really looking forward to hearing about those funny monkeys, just the idea of them all dressed up has me laughing already! Good luck.
David's story ideas:
  1. This is about a Ninja.
  2. He has to catch the evil Etchygona, the emperor's brother.
  3. The Ninja's name is Tifugee.
  4. They have an adventure at the emperor's house in China.
  5. Etchygona has the emperor locked up.
  6. Etchygona has the people of China as slaves.
  7. The people of China are depending on Tifugee to save them from the evil Etchygona.
  8. They have a lot of battles.
  9. Tifugee wins some and Etchygona wins the others.
  10. Tifugee uses a hook grabber to climb up the emperor's house and get inside to Etchygona.
  11. Tifugee defeats Etchygona at last.
David:
I happen to love stories about Ninjas. Maybe it's because I have two sons who like those kinds of stories. But I have a suggestion for you about your story. Why don't you pick ONE of the adventures/battles that you describe and tell us about that instead of trying to tell us about all these different adventures all in one story. It sounds like your outline has enough good material for a whole BOOK instead of just one story. I like the names you chose, did you make them up or are they based on characters that you already know? I look forward to seeing your first draft. Good luck!
Stephen's story ideas:
  1. There is a pig who is a troublemaker.
  2. There is also a horse, cat and duck that are friends.
  3. There is a snowstorm.
  4. The horse, cat, and duck make a snowman.
  5. The wind blows the snowman’s head off.
  6. The pig starts to kick the head around the ground.
  7. The horse lays down and the other animals crawl on his back so they can reach the top of the snowman.
  8. The animals put the snowman’s head on by working together.
  9. They all become friends.
Stephen:
I like your story idea! I like the idea of the animals working together to solve a problem. One thing that will make your story more fun to write (and to read) is if you give each of those animals a "personality." Think about the way those animals usually behave - like for instance, is the pig messy? Is the cat careful and quiet? That way when you tell the story your characters will seem more real to us. I look forward to seeing what you come up with in your first draft. Good luck!
Ana's story ideas:
  1. My story will be about two cats named Fred and Buzz that crawl in a box.
  2. The box closes and is mailed to the jungle by mistake.
  3. A jungle cat named Doug climbs on it and opens it with his claws.
  4. Now Fred and Buzz are out of the box.
  5. Fred and Buzz start to ask Doug questions but he runs away to hide.
  6. Doug hides because there is a bobcat after him.
  7. Fred and Buzz follow Doug.
  8. Fred and Buzz ask him why he was hiding.
  9. Doug said because there is a bobcat behind you.
  10. All of the cats run away to hide until the bobcat goes away.
  11. They come back out and see a sign that shows them the way out of the jungle.
  12. The three cats climb back in the box and are mailed back to the little girl that owned Fred and Buzz.
  13. Doug lives with Fred and Buzz and the little girl named Ana.
Ana:
I love the idea of two domesticated cats ending up in the jungle by mistake. That sounds like a fun topic. I hope that what you'll do is simplify your story idea a little and keep it down to three characters. Rather than have Doug, the jungle cat, AS WELL AS a bobcat, why not just have the two cats, Fred and Buzz, deal with the bobcat - who since he lives in the jungle might not even have a name! Maybe you can come up with a funny clever idea for how Fred and Buzz manage to get themselves sent home again after they decide the jungle is not for them. I know it's hard to plan things out sometimes, but if you spend a little more time thinking your story through, I have a feeling you'll be happier with it in the end. I look forward to seeing your first draft. Good luck!
Dejontrice's story ideas:
  1. My best friend and I went to the beach to swim.
  2. We played with a beach ball near the water.
  3. The ball rolled into the water.
  4. We ate a hot dog and ice cream.
  5. We saw a lot of birds flying in the sky.
  6. We brought our dog to swim with us.
  7. She was swimming.
  8. She almost drowned when a wave knocked her down.
  9. My dog saved my best friend.
Dejontrice:
You know what I like about your story idea? It's nice and simple. You will be able to write about a lot of interesting details (like the food that you ate, and the conversations that you and your friend had that day, and how the water felt and sounded and looked). Then, after you've set the scene for us, you've got this great exciting thing to tell about - how your dog saved your friend. I'm really looking forward to reading your first draft. Good luck!

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